Rewrite My Book Pitch in Mulitple formats

ステータス: Closed
賞金: $75
受け取ったエントリー: 8
優勝者: legendpb

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コンテスト概要

I need someone to rewrite my book pitch so that it still say everything it needs to say but in a more condensed way. I have two paragraphs and I need one. I need the pitch to be directed at millennials and generation zers so be careful with your tone as you rewrite it. I would love for it to sound like an epic superhero book into, Like this "In a world where society has gone bad" and then stretch that into the topic of the book and how it's here to help us reach our superhuman potential. I need to present the pitch in a way that these problems we are facing today are going to tank our ability to even reach the 22nd Century. If you can convey all these things in this pitch somehow that would be amazing.

Once you have rewritten I will also need the pitch rewritten in the following ways
1) Elevator Pitch 30s-40s
2) Twitter Pitch
3) Social Media Post
4) Publisher Pitch

Here is what I have so far:

The health of the future, 22nd Century health, is here, now, and with it the power for superhuman potential. Superheroes do exist! The 21st Century has long since put up its proverbial bat signal in search of those who would save humanity from itself. If we are to survive millennials and Generation Zers worldwide must forsake all forms of mediocracy and dawn the Superhero greatness destiny instilled in us for a time such as this. Here as a roadmap to superheroic potential and the solution to complex 21st Century issues is 22nd Century Superhero: the definitive guide to becoming a Superhero.
By the time the dust settles 22nd Century health will not only empower your superhuman potential but also embolden the strong sense of duty you have to protect the world and each other from evil wherever it rears its ugly head. Unlike the health of the 20th and 21st centuries, the wielders of 22nd Century health will use its power in ways never thought possible. The answer you’ve been looking for to ending poverty, climate change, racism, xenophobia, prejudice, and hatred is here. It’s you. The Superhero; your most powerful self. Defy Mediocracy; Embrace your superhuman potential, 22nd Century Superhero.

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“I have nothing but great things to say about Shambi. She really worked with me to make sure that my book pitch would be the right pitch for my book. She was patient when I asked her for multiple changes, she was patient when I even questioned those changes. In the end, we have a product that I am very proud of. Thank you very much Shambi and I look forward to working with her in the future. ”

therunmc, United States.

公開説明ボード

maureendass
- 6年間前
Hello CH can you please review the other entries, as I am keen to see who will be awarded the winner? Thanks :)
- 6年間前
britrich87
- 6年間前
Love the superhero idea! Just to clarify: what do you mean by 22nd Century health? What aspects of becoming a superhero does the book deal with? Can you give us a brief overview of the roadmap? Thank you!
- 6年間前
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1. コンテスト所有者
  - 6年間前
  Hopefully your still going to submit Brittany?
  - 6年間前
2. britrich87
  - 6年間前
  Sorry for the down-to-the-wire submission. It's been a busy week for projects. Hope you enjoy!
  - 6年間前
コンテスト所有者
- 6年間前
6 hours left, get your finals pitches in please
- 6年間前
falax2016b
- 6年間前
I like your approach in this book, be expecting my entry
- 6年間前
plane4you
- 6年間前
please discuss and start chat
- 6年間前
1. コンテスト所有者
  - 6年間前
  huh? Again I am not understanding what your asking. The contest has started what more are you looking for?
  - 6年間前
stilldrift
- 6年間前
Hi, when you say that you have two paragraphs and you need one, does that mean that you need one more paragraph bringing it to a total of 3 paragraphs or you just need your two paragraphs to be compressed into one.
- 6年間前
1. コンテスト所有者
  - 6年間前
  I'd prefer to have it rewritten to the one paragraph if possible AND it needs to encompass the other elements I spoke of in the description. This sense that if we don't solve these problems that plague us today they will affect our future,
  - 6年間前
plane4you
- 6年間前
Please start a chat and let me know should I start or not?
- 6年間前
1. コンテスト所有者
  - 6年間前
  I'm not understanding your question. It's a contest why wouldn't you start?
  - 6年間前
rikcw
- 6年間前
Is the competition just for the one paragraph or does it include the 4 additional pitches?
- 6年間前